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Tranquil white explosions frozen in the air
fill my visions.

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still struggling to keep up with Haikuwrimo, and having a good time recalling my spring trip to Japan. It all comes back to me. :)

kamakura, japan. april 1997.
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AngelaD Featured By Owner May 6, 2006
You don't seem to be struggling! A different but fitting description of the blossoms, very cool that you have your own preview pics to enhance your haiku!!
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moyanII Featured By Owner May 6, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
thanks! the preview pics are all taken in the trip.
i am really struggling, believe me. i run out of idea to write for today :/
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AngelaD Featured By Owner May 6, 2006
You're welcome!

Maybe tomorrow will bring a new ideas!!
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AbCat Featured By Owner May 5, 2006   Writer
Is it snow?
If it is snow, 'explosion' is a great word for a snowflake.
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moyanII Featured By Owner May 5, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
it's sakura T^T
i thought the action of sakura 'fiercely' blossoming fits 'explosions'.
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AbCat Featured By Owner May 6, 2006   Writer
I've never actually seen a sakura blossom. I like the idea of white petals being frozen. Excellent.
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moyanII Featured By Owner May 6, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
something like what is shown in the preview pic for the poem :)
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AbCat Featured By Owner May 6, 2006   Writer
Beautiful. Just how I imagined it after reading so many haiku on it.
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MSJames Featured By Owner May 5, 2006
I'm glad you're keeping up and I love your memories and your haiku! :) I did notice that you're not providing the original japanes on this one! ;)

Now, on to the haiku....

I think it would read better thusly...

Tranquil, white
explosions frozen in the air
fill my vision.

Just my opinion though. :)
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moyanII Featured By Owner May 5, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
not providing the japanese ones because i do not have one. =p
the line breaks hmmm... i am not good at that, will polish it up when i have time.
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